https://mail.joyouswriting.com/index.php?title=%E8%AE%A8%E8%AE%BA:%E2%85%A3_%E5%B0%8F%E7%BB%844&action=history 本站上此页的修订历史 zh-cn MediaWiki 1.15.1 Mon, 07 Sep 2026 18:54:04 GMT https://mail.joyouswriting.com/index.php?title=%E8%AE%A8%E8%AE%BA:%E2%85%A3_%E5%B0%8F%E7%BB%844&diff=2528&oldid=prev <p></p> <table style="background-color: white; color:black;"> <col class='diff-marker' /> <col class='diff-content' /> <col class='diff-marker' /> <col class='diff-content' /> <tr valign='top'> <td colspan='2' style="background-color: white; color:black;">←上一修订</td> <td colspan='2' style="background-color: white; color:black;">在2011年6月3日 (五) 07:43所做的修订版本</td> </tr> <tr><td colspan="2" class="diff-lineno">第29行：</td> <td colspan="2" class="diff-lineno">第29行：</td></tr> <tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"></td></tr> <tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div>继续努力！（黄梓效）</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div>继续努力！（黄梓效）</div></td></tr> <tr><td colspan="2">&nbsp;</td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="background: #cfc; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div><ins style="color: red; font-weight: bold; text-decoration: none;"></ins></div></td></tr> <tr><td colspan="2">&nbsp;</td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="background: #cfc; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div><ins style="color: red; font-weight: bold; text-decoration: none;">玉纯评：“你们写的不错！”</ins></div></td></tr> <!-- diff generator: internal 2026-09-07 18:54:04 --> </table> Fri, 03 Jun 2011 07:43:38 GMT 玉纯 https://mail.joyouswriting.com/index.php/%E8%AE%A8%E8%AE%BA:%E2%85%A3_%E5%B0%8F%E7%BB%844 https://mail.joyouswriting.com/index.php?title=%E8%AE%A8%E8%AE%BA:%E2%85%A3_%E5%B0%8F%E7%BB%844&diff=2522&oldid=prev <p></p> <table style="background-color: white; color:black;"> <col class='diff-marker' /> <col class='diff-content' /> <col class='diff-marker' /> <col class='diff-content' /> <tr valign='top'> <td colspan='2' style="background-color: white; color:black;">←上一修订</td> <td colspan='2' style="background-color: white; color:black;">在2011年6月3日 (五) 07:42所做的修订版本</td> </tr> <tr><td colspan="2" class="diff-lineno">第26行：</td> <td colspan="2" class="diff-lineno">第26行：</td></tr> <tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div>利新宇评：“确实有一点跑题，以后要注意哦！</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div>利新宇评：“确实有一点跑题，以后要注意哦！</div></td></tr> <tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"></td></tr> <tr><td colspan="2">&nbsp;</td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="background: #cfc; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div><ins style="color: red; font-weight: bold; text-decoration: none;">艺辉评：“你们写的还可以！”</ins></div></td></tr> <tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"></td></tr> <tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div>继续努力！（黄梓效）</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div>继续努力！（黄梓效）</div></td></tr> <!-- diff generator: internal 2026-09-07 18:54:04 --> </table> Fri, 03 Jun 2011 07:42:24 GMT 艺辉 https://mail.joyouswriting.com/index.php/%E8%AE%A8%E8%AE%BA:%E2%85%A3_%E5%B0%8F%E7%BB%844 https://mail.joyouswriting.com/index.php?title=%E8%AE%A8%E8%AE%BA:%E2%85%A3_%E5%B0%8F%E7%BB%844&diff=2497&oldid=prev <p></p> <table style="background-color: white; color:black;"> <col class='diff-marker' /> <col class='diff-content' /> <col class='diff-marker' /> <col class='diff-content' /> <tr valign='top'> <td colspan='2' style="background-color: white; color:black;">←上一修订</td> <td colspan='2' style="background-color: white; color:black;">在2011年6月3日 (五) 07:38所做的修订版本</td> </tr> <tr><td colspan="2" class="diff-lineno">第25行：</td> <td colspan="2" class="diff-lineno">第25行：</td></tr> <tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"></td></tr> <tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div>利新宇评：“确实有一点跑题，以后要注意哦！</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div>利新宇评：“确实有一点跑题，以后要注意哦！</div></td></tr> <tr><td colspan="2">&nbsp;</td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="background: #cfc; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div><ins style="color: red; font-weight: bold; text-decoration: none;"></ins></div></td></tr> <tr><td colspan="2">&nbsp;</td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="background: #cfc; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div><ins style="color: red; font-weight: bold; text-decoration: none;"></ins></div></td></tr> <tr><td colspan="2">&nbsp;</td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="background: #cfc; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div><ins style="color: red; font-weight: bold; text-decoration: none;">继续努力！（黄梓效）</ins></div></td></tr> <!-- diff generator: internal 2026-09-07 18:54:04 --> </table> Fri, 03 Jun 2011 07:38:49 GMT 梓效 https://mail.joyouswriting.com/index.php/%E8%AE%A8%E8%AE%BA:%E2%85%A3_%E5%B0%8F%E7%BB%844 https://mail.joyouswriting.com/index.php?title=%E8%AE%A8%E8%AE%BA:%E2%85%A3_%E5%B0%8F%E7%BB%844&diff=2492&oldid=prev <p></p> <table style="background-color: white; color:black;"> <col class='diff-marker' /> <col class='diff-content' /> <col class='diff-marker' /> <col class='diff-content' /> <tr valign='top'> <td colspan='2' style="background-color: white; color:black;">←上一修订</td> <td colspan='2' style="background-color: white; color:black;">在2011年6月3日 (五) 07:37所做的修订版本</td> </tr> <tr><td colspan="2" class="diff-lineno">第23行：</td> <td colspan="2" class="diff-lineno">第23行：</td></tr> <tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"></td></tr> <tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div>镕楷评：“有点儿跑题了！主要没有小狗花花当医生，而是小狗花花的爸爸治病。”</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div>镕楷评：“有点儿跑题了！主要没有小狗花花当医生，而是小狗花花的爸爸治病。”</div></td></tr> <tr><td colspan="2">&nbsp;</td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="background: #cfc; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div><ins style="color: red; font-weight: bold; text-decoration: none;"></ins></div></td></tr> <tr><td colspan="2">&nbsp;</td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="background: #cfc; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div><ins style="color: red; font-weight: bold; text-decoration: none;">利新宇评：“确实有一点跑题，以后要注意哦！</ins></div></td></tr> <!-- diff generator: internal 2026-09-07 18:54:04 --> </table> Fri, 03 Jun 2011 07:37:46 GMT Ky-利新宇 https://mail.joyouswriting.com/index.php/%E8%AE%A8%E8%AE%BA:%E2%85%A3_%E5%B0%8F%E7%BB%844 https://mail.joyouswriting.com/index.php?title=%E8%AE%A8%E8%AE%BA:%E2%85%A3_%E5%B0%8F%E7%BB%844&diff=2481&oldid=prev <p></p> <table style="background-color: white; color:black;"> <col class='diff-marker' /> <col class='diff-content' /> <col class='diff-marker' /> <col class='diff-content' /> <tr valign='top'> <td colspan='2' style="background-color: white; color:black;">←上一修订</td> <td colspan='2' style="background-color: white; color:black;">在2011年6月3日 (五) 07:36所做的修订版本</td> </tr> <tr><td colspan="2" class="diff-lineno">第22行：</td> <td colspan="2" class="diff-lineno">第22行：</td></tr> <tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div>幸波评：“你们写的挺好，如果再写的生动一些，那不是更好吗？还有，你们的标点符号有些是错的，而且有些语句不通顺，加油！”</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div>幸波评：“你们写的挺好，如果再写的生动一些，那不是更好吗？还有，你们的标点符号有些是错的，而且有些语句不通顺，加油！”</div></td></tr> <tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"></td></tr> <tr><td class='diff-marker'>-</td><td style="background: #ffa; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div><del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">不错（徐逸）</del></div></td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="background: #cfc; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div><ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">镕楷评：“有点儿跑题了！主要没有小狗花花当医生，而是小狗花花的爸爸治病。”</ins></div></td></tr> <!-- diff generator: internal 2026-09-07 18:54:04 --> </table> Fri, 03 Jun 2011 07:36:31 GMT 镕楷 https://mail.joyouswriting.com/index.php/%E8%AE%A8%E8%AE%BA:%E2%85%A3_%E5%B0%8F%E7%BB%844 https://mail.joyouswriting.com/index.php?title=%E8%AE%A8%E8%AE%BA:%E2%85%A3_%E5%B0%8F%E7%BB%844&diff=2462&oldid=prev <p></p> <table style="background-color: white; color:black;"> <col class='diff-marker' /> <col class='diff-content' /> <col class='diff-marker' /> <col class='diff-content' /> <tr valign='top'> <td colspan='2' style="background-color: white; color:black;">←上一修订</td> <td colspan='2' style="background-color: white; color:black;">在2011年6月3日 (五) 07:32所做的修订版本</td> </tr> <tr><td colspan="2" class="diff-lineno">第21行：</td> <td colspan="2" class="diff-lineno">第21行：</td></tr> <tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"></td></tr> <tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div>幸波评：“你们写的挺好，如果再写的生动一些，那不是更好吗？还有，你们的标点符号有些是错的，而且有些语句不通顺，加油！”</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div>幸波评：“你们写的挺好，如果再写的生动一些，那不是更好吗？还有，你们的标点符号有些是错的，而且有些语句不通顺，加油！”</div></td></tr> <tr><td colspan="2">&nbsp;</td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="background: #cfc; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div><ins style="color: red; font-weight: bold; text-decoration: none;"></ins></div></td></tr> <tr><td colspan="2">&nbsp;</td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="background: #cfc; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div><ins style="color: red; font-weight: bold; text-decoration: none;">不错（徐逸）</ins></div></td></tr> <!-- diff generator: internal 2026-09-07 18:54:04 --> </table> Fri, 03 Jun 2011 07:32:54 GMT 徐逸 https://mail.joyouswriting.com/index.php/%E8%AE%A8%E8%AE%BA:%E2%85%A3_%E5%B0%8F%E7%BB%844 https://mail.joyouswriting.com/index.php?title=%E8%AE%A8%E8%AE%BA:%E2%85%A3_%E5%B0%8F%E7%BB%844&diff=2453&oldid=prev <p></p> <table style="background-color: white; color:black;"> <col class='diff-marker' /> <col class='diff-content' /> <col class='diff-marker' /> <col class='diff-content' /> <tr valign='top'> <td colspan='2' style="background-color: white; color:black;">←上一修订</td> <td colspan='2' style="background-color: white; color:black;">在2011年6月3日 (五) 07:31所做的修订版本</td> </tr> <tr><td colspan="2" class="diff-lineno">第19行：</td> <td colspan="2" class="diff-lineno">第19行：</td></tr> <tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"></td></tr> <tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div>你们写的挺好，如果再写的生动一些，那不是更好吗？还有，你们的标点符号有些是错的，而且有些语句不通顺，加油！</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div>你们写的挺好，如果再写的生动一些，那不是更好吗？还有，你们的标点符号有些是错的，而且有些语句不通顺，加油！</div></td></tr> <tr><td colspan="2">&nbsp;</td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="background: #cfc; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div><ins style="color: red; font-weight: bold; text-decoration: none;"></ins></div></td></tr> <tr><td colspan="2">&nbsp;</td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="background: #cfc; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div><ins style="color: red; font-weight: bold; text-decoration: none;">幸波评：“你们写的挺好，如果再写的生动一些，那不是更好吗？还有，你们的标点符号有些是错的，而且有些语句不通顺，加油！”</ins></div></td></tr> <!-- diff generator: internal 2026-09-07 18:54:04 --> </table> Fri, 03 Jun 2011 07:31:42 GMT 幸波 https://mail.joyouswriting.com/index.php/%E8%AE%A8%E8%AE%BA:%E2%85%A3_%E5%B0%8F%E7%BB%844 https://mail.joyouswriting.com/index.php?title=%E8%AE%A8%E8%AE%BA:%E2%85%A3_%E5%B0%8F%E7%BB%844&diff=2447&oldid=prev <p></p> <table style="background-color: white; color:black;"> <col class='diff-marker' /> <col class='diff-content' /> <col class='diff-marker' /> <col class='diff-content' /> <tr valign='top'> <td colspan='2' style="background-color: white; color:black;">←上一修订</td> <td colspan='2' style="background-color: white; color:black;">在2011年6月3日 (五) 07:29所做的修订版本</td> </tr> <tr><td colspan="2" class="diff-lineno">第17行：</td> <td colspan="2" class="diff-lineno">第17行：</td></tr> <tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"></td></tr> <tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div>浩德评：你们写的很仔细，病人写的很清楚。</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div>浩德评：你们写的很仔细，病人写的很清楚。</div></td></tr> <tr><td colspan="2">&nbsp;</td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="background: #cfc; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div><ins style="color: red; font-weight: bold; text-decoration: none;"></ins></div></td></tr> <tr><td colspan="2">&nbsp;</td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="background: #cfc; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div><ins style="color: red; font-weight: bold; text-decoration: none;">你们写的挺好，如果再写的生动一些，那不是更好吗？还有，你们的标点符号有些是错的，而且有些语句不通顺，加油！</ins></div></td></tr> <!-- diff generator: internal 2026-09-07 18:54:04 --> </table> Fri, 03 Jun 2011 07:29:34 GMT 幸波 https://mail.joyouswriting.com/index.php/%E8%AE%A8%E8%AE%BA:%E2%85%A3_%E5%B0%8F%E7%BB%844 https://mail.joyouswriting.com/index.php?title=%E8%AE%A8%E8%AE%BA:%E2%85%A3_%E5%B0%8F%E7%BB%844&diff=2413&oldid=prev <p></p> <table style="background-color: white; color:black;"> <col class='diff-marker' /> <col class='diff-content' /> <col class='diff-marker' /> <col class='diff-content' /> <tr valign='top'> <td colspan='2' style="background-color: white; color:black;">←上一修订</td> <td colspan='2' style="background-color: white; color:black;">在2011年6月3日 (五) 07:23所做的修订版本</td> </tr> <tr><td colspan="2" class="diff-lineno">第16行：</td> <td colspan="2" class="diff-lineno">第16行：</td></tr> <tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div>杨捷凯评：你们写的很不错，可是字要写多一点。</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div>杨捷凯评：你们写的很不错，可是字要写多一点。</div></td></tr> <tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"></td></tr> <tr><td class='diff-marker'>-</td><td style="background: #ffa; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div><del class="diffchange diffchange-inline">浩德评：你们写的很仔细，病人写的很清楚</del></div></td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="background: #cfc; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div><ins class="diffchange diffchange-inline">浩德评：你们写的很仔细，病人写的很清楚。</ins></div></td></tr> <!-- diff generator: internal 2026-09-07 18:54:04 --> </table> Fri, 03 Jun 2011 07:23:38 GMT 浩德 https://mail.joyouswriting.com/index.php/%E8%AE%A8%E8%AE%BA:%E2%85%A3_%E5%B0%8F%E7%BB%844 https://mail.joyouswriting.com/index.php?title=%E8%AE%A8%E8%AE%BA:%E2%85%A3_%E5%B0%8F%E7%BB%844&diff=2411&oldid=prev <p></p> <table style="background-color: white; color:black;"> <col class='diff-marker' /> <col class='diff-content' /> <col class='diff-marker' /> <col class='diff-content' /> <tr valign='top'> <td colspan='2' style="background-color: white; color:black;">←上一修订</td> <td colspan='2' style="background-color: white; color:black;">在2011年6月3日 (五) 07:23所做的修订版本</td> </tr> <tr><td colspan="2" class="diff-lineno">第15行：</td> <td colspan="2" class="diff-lineno">第15行：</td></tr> <tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div>你们写得很生动，但写得很少，加油！（卓煜玲敬上）</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div>你们写得很生动，但写得很少，加油！（卓煜玲敬上）</div></td></tr> <tr><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div>杨捷凯评：你们写的很不错，可是字要写多一点。</div></td><td class='diff-marker'> </td><td style="background: #eee; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div>杨捷凯评：你们写的很不错，可是字要写多一点。</div></td></tr> <tr><td colspan="2">&nbsp;</td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="background: #cfc; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div><ins style="color: red; font-weight: bold; text-decoration: none;"></ins></div></td></tr> <tr><td colspan="2">&nbsp;</td><td class='diff-marker'>+</td><td style="background: #cfc; color:black; font-size: smaller;"><div><ins style="color: red; font-weight: bold; text-decoration: none;">浩德评：你们写的很仔细，病人写的很清楚</ins></div></td></tr> <!-- diff generator: internal 2026-09-07 18:54:04 --> </table> Fri, 03 Jun 2011 07:23:21 GMT 浩德 https://mail.joyouswriting.com/index.php/%E8%AE%A8%E8%AE%BA:%E2%85%A3_%E5%B0%8F%E7%BB%844